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Im done, anything i should fix/change?

https://docs.google.com/document/d/1OJFyoxnvlLM54BtV8WCp2UYiCuw547cuOTy3qGvOf1g/edit?usp=sharing

n0ah1897, on 05 Mar 2014 - 2:08 PM, said:  "Computers are like girls. It's whats in the inside that matters.  I don't know about you, but I like my girls like I like my cases. Just as beautiful on the inside as the outside."

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It seems, ok, Spencer Thomas.

 

I like it Spencer, a bit short though maybe?

 

Doesnt say that anywere  :ph34r:

Supposed to be 3-5 pages double spaced so 4 pages is good

n0ah1897, on 05 Mar 2014 - 2:08 PM, said:  "Computers are like girls. It's whats in the inside that matters.  I don't know about you, but I like my girls like I like my cases. Just as beautiful on the inside as the outside."

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Doesnt say that anywere  :ph34r:

Supposed to be 3-5 pages double spaced so 4 pages is good

It has it in the list of people up top. Everybody else viewing is anonymous, but it shows your real name. 

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You probably should either indent or put a line between paragraphs, but not both. Also citations could be nice.

That takes more space tho :)

I do have parenthetical documentation within it, and a bibliography in a seperate document

https://docs.google.com/document/d/1bUoFsE-rcBZvmxkmLi-oQSDfEV40zNo28lEGgWGlt_k/edit?usp=sharing

n0ah1897, on 05 Mar 2014 - 2:08 PM, said:  "Computers are like girls. It's whats in the inside that matters.  I don't know about you, but I like my girls like I like my cases. Just as beautiful on the inside as the outside."

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I only made it through the first sentence. I would not start you paper with that sentence. it does not follow well. 

 

im editing this

 

edit: maybe something like this?

 

Governments have a propensity to keep secrets from the people in the advent of national security. However, some believe that the people should not be kept in the dark and that all information should be freely accessible.

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It has it in the list of people up top. Everybody else viewing is anonymous, but it shows your real name. 

Oh, i thought you read my name at the top of the essay, so i just changed it to spwath :)

n0ah1897, on 05 Mar 2014 - 2:08 PM, said:  "Computers are like girls. It's whats in the inside that matters.  I don't know about you, but I like my girls like I like my cases. Just as beautiful on the inside as the outside."

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Should put date the source was published and where is the reference list. (I just wrote a marketing plan for uni just then lol)

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Should put date the source was published and where is the reference list. (I just wrote a marketing plan for uni just then lol)

https://docs.google.com/document/d/1bUoFsE-rcBZvmxkmLi-oQSDfEV40zNo28lEGgWGlt_k/edit?usp=sharing

n0ah1897, on 05 Mar 2014 - 2:08 PM, said:  "Computers are like girls. It's whats in the inside that matters.  I don't know about you, but I like my girls like I like my cases. Just as beautiful on the inside as the outside."

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Yeah page didn't refresh man. Still when you site a source in an essay you should put the year the source was published

 

eg. (ya mum, 2015)

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It's okay SPENCER THOMAS.

My name is SPencer WA**** THomas

                           SP WA TH

n0ah1897, on 05 Mar 2014 - 2:08 PM, said:  "Computers are like girls. It's whats in the inside that matters.  I don't know about you, but I like my girls like I like my cases. Just as beautiful on the inside as the outside."

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@Spwath

  Spencer Thomas

 

Now where did the 'wath' come from...

 

 

My name is SPencer WA**** THomas

                           SP WA TH

How the fuck did you ninja that? *Gives cookie*

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Yeah page didn't refresh man. Still when you site a source in an essay you should put the year the source was published

 

eg. (ya mum, 2015)

My teacher told us to just do that, and have the seperate bibliography, which has the dates.

We got specific instructions on siteing

n0ah1897, on 05 Mar 2014 - 2:08 PM, said:  "Computers are like girls. It's whats in the inside that matters.  I don't know about you, but I like my girls like I like my cases. Just as beautiful on the inside as the outside."

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actually most of the paper could use some better grammar. how old are you?

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@Spwath

  Spencer Thomas

 

Now where did the 'wath' come from...

spwath

SPencer Wa***** Thomas

***= rest of middle name

n0ah1897, on 05 Mar 2014 - 2:08 PM, said:  "Computers are like girls. It's whats in the inside that matters.  I don't know about you, but I like my girls like I like my cases. Just as beautiful on the inside as the outside."

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actually most of the paper could use some better grammar. how old are you?

15

n0ah1897, on 05 Mar 2014 - 2:08 PM, said:  "Computers are like girls. It's whats in the inside that matters.  I don't know about you, but I like my girls like I like my cases. Just as beautiful on the inside as the outside."

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