Opinion and ideas to improve :D

[Froger96]

hi guys, first of all, i want to say, im not sure if this is something that is ok to be posted here, but i just want peoples opinions on my project for college and how it can be improved to get a better grade.

 

ok, first of all, i have made a video with some other people advertising forensic science course for my college. the video is limited at 3 minutes. i cant really re film. but i have  most programmes that can help me with editing. cinema 4D premiere after effects. whatever really. now i just want to get some ideas on how this video can be improved, so either post on here or in the comments of the video on what can be improved and please include a time code of when you are referring too and be detail please. 

here is the video:  https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=OvUOdl0w2Rc&list=UURBE9Pmsk2S2X598ATO9uJg  

thanks for any help.