USA university

[Schony125]

Hello guys I wanted to go to university in the US and I need to send an Email to the university but Im not sure if it sounds good (im not english speaking) thanx for the help

 

 

 

Dear Sir or Madam,

 

This is to request more information about Your Mechanical Engineering degree program.

I am interested in this course and I would like to apply for it in your renowned University for admission in 2016.

                                                         

I am currently attending the last year of four of apprenticeship as a Mechatronic at SPAI of Biasca, Switzerland. (which consists of 2 days of the week at school and the others in a official Opel, Hyundai, Citroen, Suzuki, Daihatsu dealer as a automobile mechatronic trained by a qualified, graduate repair technician (diagnostic specialist)).

 

After attending final exams in June 2016 I will obtein an AFC (Federal Certificate of Competence).

 

 

My school career is the following:

 

5 years of primary school                  Instituto Elvetico Fondazione don Bosco, Lugano, Switzerland

 

4 years of high school                       2 in Instituto Elvetico Fondazione don Bosco, Lugano, Switzerland

 

2 in Parklands College

Cape Town, South Africa

 

2 years as a mechanic                      SPAI Biasca, Switzerland

2 years as a mechatronic                           SPAI Biasca, Switzerland

 

 

I would like to inquire about qualification and in particular, if I meet the requirements for attending Your mechanical engineering program.

 

I would also like to know if I would be classified as a home/EU student or as an international student for fees purposes. I am a Swiss citizen with Swiss and Italian/EU passaports.

 

Thank you in advance for your attention to my request. I look forward to receiving your response.

 

Sincerely

 

 

 

[thatguyyouknow75]

looks good, may i ask what university youre applying to?

[Venomz1337]

Perfect except a couple of mistakes

 

I think "inquire" is spelt "enquire" but don't quote me on that one.

 

"Your" should be "your"

 

"passaport" should be "passport".

 

But other than that, you're golden.

[Real_PhillBert]

Looks good. Their admissions office will be able to tell you a whole lot more than we can here.

 

Good Luck

 

<- Mechanical Engineer

[tbroadwater2010]

Dear Sir or Madam,

 

This is to request more information about your Mechanical Engineering degree program.

I am interested in this course and I would like to apply for it in your renowned University for admission in 2016.

                                                         

I am currently attending the last year of four of apprenticeship as a Mechatronic at SPAI of Biasca, Switzerland*no period here*(which consists of 2 days of the week at school and the others in a official Opel, Hyundai, Citroen, Suzuki, Daihatsu dealer as a automobile mechatronic trained by a qualified, graduate repair technician (diagnostic specialist)).

 

After attending final exams in June 2016,*add the comma* I will obtain an AFC (Federal Certificate of Competence).

 

 

My school career is the following:

 

5 years of primary school                  Instituto Elvetico Fondazione don Bosco, Lugano, Switzerland

 

4 years of high school                       2 in Instituto Elvetico Fondazione don Bosco, Lugano, Switzerland

 

2 in Parklands College

Cape Town, South Africa

 

2 years as a mechanic                      SPAI Biasca, Switzerland

2 years as a mechatronic                           SPAI Biasca, Switzerland

 

 

I would like to inquire about qualification,*comma here* and in particular, if I meet the requirements for attending your mechanical engineering program.

 

I would also like to know if I would be classified as a home/EU student or as an international student for fees purposes. I am a Swiss citizen with Swiss and Italian/EU passports.

 

Thank you in advance for your attention to my request. I look forward to receiving your response.

 

Sincerely

 

 

I made some changes for you for better English grammar, Do not add the *things in here* to your document

[Schony125]

thank you very much guys really helpful and fast

 

the university is arizona state or university of arizona. I would prefer arizona state because the fact that it is in phoenix but university of arizona looks better.

[Schony125]

looks good, may i ask what university youre applying to?

 

 

Perfect except a couple of mistakes

 

I think "inquire" is spelt "enquire" but don't quote me on that one.

 

"Your" should be "your"

 

"passaport" should be "passport".

 

But other than that, you're golden.

 

 

Looks good. Their admissions office will be able to tell you a whole lot more than we can here.

 

Good Luck

 

<- Mechanical Engineer

 

 

 

Dear Sir or Madam,

 

This is to request more information about your Mechanical Engineering degree program.

I am interested in this course and I would like to apply for it in your renowned University for admission in 2016.

                                                         

I am currently attending the last year of four of apprenticeship as a Mechatronic at SPAI of Biasca, Switzerland*no period here*(which consists of 2 days of the week at school and the others in a official Opel, Hyundai, Citroen, Suzuki, Daihatsu dealer as a automobile mechatronic trained by a qualified, graduate repair technician (diagnostic specialist)).

 

After attending final exams in June 2016,*add the comma* I will obtain an AFC (Federal Certificate of Competence).

 

 

My school career is the following:

 

5 years of primary school                  Instituto Elvetico Fondazione don Bosco, Lugano, Switzerland

 

4 years of high school                       2 in Instituto Elvetico Fondazione don Bosco, Lugano, Switzerland

 

2 in Parklands College

Cape Town, South Africa

 

2 years as a mechanic                      SPAI Biasca, Switzerland

2 years as a mechatronic                           SPAI Biasca, Switzerland

 

 

I would like to inquire about qualification,*comma here* and in particular, if I meet the requirements for attending your mechanical engineering program.

 

I would also like to know if I would be classified as a home/EU student or as an international student for fees purposes. I am a Swiss citizen with Swiss and Italian/EU passports.

 

Thank you in advance for your attention to my request. I look forward to receiving your response.

 

Sincerely

 

 

I made some changes for you for better English grammar, Do not add the *things in here* to your document

 

Thank You very much to all