Pinnacle Gaming is now live, can you guys proofread my site?

[SubLimation7]

It's been a long day and I'm really sleepy lol, but I have my website mostly done and its live, figured this would be a good place to post it before I start advertising if you guys wanna review it for me.  Try not to be too hard, theres a few things I know I need to go back and tweek and I want to add some more build logs to blog.  But maybe you guys will have some good ideas for me or catch something stupid I missed. 

 

Thanks a lot to anyone who participates!

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Hope this is the right place for this.

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[2FA]

Regardless of the self-advertising, I will give my feedback.

 

I think the cyan color for the introductory pop-up is hard to read. That might be because I'm borderline color blind to those colors but still.

[Guest]

480 4gb or 8gb?

https://www.pinnaclegamingpc.com/product-page/ol-blue-doorbuster

[SubLimation7]

18 hours ago, DeadEyePsycho said:

Regardless of the self-advertising, I will give my feedback.

 

I think the cyan color for the introductory pop-up is hard to read. That might be because I'm borderline color blind to those colors but still.

Haha, thanks, I really appreciate that.  Changing it now, any suggestions for color though?  FWIW I'm not gonna keep doing posts like this, just here, and seriously want some feedback.

18 hours ago, deXxterlab97 said:

480 4gb or 8gb?

https://www.pinnaclegamingpc.com/product-page/ol-blue-doorbuster

8gb thanks

[ProjectBox153]

Looks pretty good to me. The color of the popup at the beginning is a little harsh, but it's not bad. 

[Guest]

Just now, SubLimation7 said:

8gb thanks

should have put a z170 ud3 ultra for more blue

 

A deepcool gammaxx 400 for even more blue cooling

 

 

[2FA]

Just now, SubLimation7 said:

Haha, thanks, I really appreciate that.  Changing it now, any suggestions for color though?  FWIW I'm not gonna keep doing post like this, just here, and seriously want some feedback.

Typically you want to avoid really light colors like that, as well as red and green. A blue similar to those used for "Used" and "Introductory Special" might be better.

 

You should also make a cookie so that users don't get that introduction after their initial visit.

[tp95112]

Does the "Welcome to Pinnacle..." always pop up when you enter, seems annoying.

[SubLimation7]

1 minute ago, deXxterlab97 said:

should have put a z170 ud3 ultra for more blue

 

A deepcool gammaxx 400 for even more blue cooling

 

 

Good ideas, I'll keep it in mind.  But you'll start seeing a lot "better" themed builds coming up.  I have a really cool 1800x build, just waiting on 1080ti partner cards.

[Guest]

Just now, SubLimation7 said:

Good ideas, I'll keep it in mind.  But you'll start seeing a lot "better" themed builds coming up.  I have a really cool 1800x build, just waiting on 1080ti partner cards.

since ultra doesn't come in stock often here is an alternative

[SubLimation7]

7 minutes ago, SubLimation7 said:

Haha, thanks, I really appreciate that.  Changing it now, any suggestions for color though?  FWIW I'm not gonna keep doing posts like this, just here, and seriously want some feedback.

fixed this and rx480 memory

[ProjectBox153]

4 minutes ago, deXxterlab97 said:

should have put a z170 ud3 ultra for more blue

 

 

A deepcool gammaxx 400 for even more blue cooling

 

 

 

Back with the blue again!

[SubLimation7]

3 minutes ago, tp95112 said:

Does the "Welcome to Pinnacle..." always pop up when you enter, seems annoying.

Yes I usually don't like the popups either, just wanted to make it to where the less "investigative" people still understand what sets me apart.  But I'll definitely try and find a way to reduce frequency.

[Guest]

also the pic you took on ol blue doesn't have a gpu installed and the mirror reflects you too so might wanna have a better pic

[tp95112]

1 minute ago, SubLimation7 said:

Yes I usually don't like the popups either, just wanted to make it to where the less "investigative" people still understand what sets me apart.  But I'll definitely try and find a way to reduce frequency.

 

To be honest I had no idea what the site was, assumed it was like a hardware review site or something until I scrolled down and clicked on the pc shown

[MoonlightSylv]

Where to even begin, this PC is a complete BEAST whether your a professional editior, hardcore gamer, play at 4k, HTC vive, Oculus rift, it can easily do it all

 

https://www.pinnaclegamingpc.com/product-page/doorbuster-special-one-in-stock

[SubLimation7]

18 hours ago, tp95112 said:

To be honest I had no idea what the site was, assumed it was like a hardware review site or something until I scrolled down and clicked on the pc shown

I definitely see your original point that much more than lol.

 

I think I'm going to turn in, I fixed the couple things you guys brought up and thanks a million for that.  I'm just to the point where my fingers can barely even type lol, but if anyone else posts I'll definitely revisit this in the morning.

[tp95112]

Just now, SubLimation7 said:

I definitely see your original point that much more than lol.

Im the type of guy where the site should immediately tell me what is it without even having to look at any words that's what a lot of users that go on your site is going to want. It should be an instant that you know, "oh this site builds custom pc". People are lazy and down want to read a wall of text. Your first point should be like "we build custom pc" not "We are a one man show". To me its like idgf harsh but true

[2FA]

OK I just realized that you use faint red for the text on the pages.

 

That is a big no no in web development. Not only is having a faint color hard to read, you also have to take into account that the most common form of color blindness is red/green.

 

I would suggest just sticking to black text and using red as an accent color.

[SubLimation7]

18 hours ago, ShadowTechXTS said:

Where to even begin, this PC is a complete BEAST whether your a professional editior, hardcore gamer, play at 4k, HTC vive, Oculus rift, it can easily do it all

 

https://www.pinnaclegamingpc.com/product-page/doorbuster-special-one-in-stock

Haha thanks, definitely need to do some deeper proofreading.  Keep em coming and I'll update in the AM.  Really appreciate it.

18 hours ago, DeadEyePsycho said:

OK I just realized that you use faint red for the text on the pages.

 

That is a big no no in web development. Not only is having a faint color hard to read, you also have to take into account that the most common form of color blindness is red/green.

 

I would suggest just sticking to black text and using red as an accent color.

Funny thing is, my "marketing" friend recommended that lol!! Good point though!!

[BlueChinchillaEatingDorito]

"The only catch with this PC is there is only 1, once it sells its gone.  I just really hope whoever buys it leaves some good reviews and a shoutout or two.  I'm losing a good bit of money on this build.  If you were to buy the parts today, "

 

Yea... I don't know about that. Have to be more professional mate.

[SubLimation7]

3 minutes ago, BlueChinchillaEatingDorito said:

"The only catch with this PC is there is only 1, once it sells its gone.  I just really hope whoever buys it leaves some good reviews and a shoutout or two.  I'm losing a good bit of money on this build.  If you were to buy the parts today, "

 

Yea... I don't know about that. Have to be more professional mate.

I'm definitely doing something different no doubt about that.  And your probably right, but I really am selling it at a loss so it would be pretty upsetting if someone bought it and didn't leave a review or anything lol.  But with that being said I definitely see your point, my thinking is that as things pickup the site will evolve with it. 

 

If nothing else I could reword it. 

 

With so much BS and scams in todays world I'm almost scared that I'm scaring people away by "overselling".

[BlueChinchillaEatingDorito]

Just now, SubLimation7 said:

I'm definitely doing something different no doubt about that.  And your probably right, but I really am selling it at a loss so it would be pretty upsetting if someone bought it and didn't leave a review or anything lol.  But with that being said I definitely see your point, my thinking is that as things pickup the site will evolve with it. 

 

If nothing else I could reword it. 

Well that's how you start a business. You have to absorb initial losses before it starts making a profit.

[SubLimation7]

18 hours ago, BlueChinchillaEatingDorito said:

Well that's how you start a business. You have to absorb initial losses before it starts making a profit.

Fixed, thanks.

18 hours ago, tp95112 said:

Im the type of guy where the site should immediately tell me what is it without even having to look at any words that's what a lot of users that go on your site is going to want. It should be an instant that you know, "oh this site builds custom pc". People are lazy and down want to read a wall of text. Your first point should be like "we build custom pc" not "We are a one man show". To me its like idgf harsh but true

The reason I put that is to let people know that your money isn't going to a workforce and lots of overhead like renting a building, land, etc. 

 

I do see your point, however I'm assuming if people find my site organically they will be looking for PCs

[ProjectBox153]

Is this supposed to be an actual link?